tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4984184121584258371.post962051479099115385..comments2024-01-21T06:03:05.829-08:00Comments on Patti Nielson: Hooks and ContestsPattihttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00685341739870191402noreply@blogger.comBlogger13125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4984184121584258371.post-66500393502338635732010-08-06T09:09:51.618-07:002010-08-06T09:09:51.618-07:00Thanks for linking to our contest!Thanks for linking to our contest!Roni Lorenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02719679344024635326noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4984184121584258371.post-12878250501865365802010-08-04T11:24:48.765-07:002010-08-04T11:24:48.765-07:00Thanks for weighing in Jessica.Thanks for weighing in Jessica.Pattihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00685341739870191402noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4984184121584258371.post-43137069331254172592010-08-04T10:25:29.599-07:002010-08-04T10:25:29.599-07:00I think this is a really great hook; it's inti...I think this is a really great hook; it's intiguing and it makes you want to know more - like, why will the girl he loves die because he is assigned dragon rescue? and Who is this damsel in distress?<br /><br />And that's the whole point of a good hook, to grab a reader's attention and make them want to read the book. In this aspect, I think you nailed it.<br /><br />Now, I agree with others that I'm not sure I like the word "assigned". I agree with Heidi, I think "draws" might be a better word choice. I think it would just make the sentence a little stronger.<br /><br />But otherwise, I think you did a great job!Jessica Ann Hillhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14131293013101275074noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4984184121584258371.post-70848294951605384352010-08-04T06:50:53.452-07:002010-08-04T06:50:53.452-07:00Love it...except for one thing.
To me hooks most i...Love it...except for one thing.<br />To me hooks most intrigue when they end with a question, whether literally or just an open scenario.<br /><br />Like Will his choice lead to the death of...<br /><br />Just me, probably.<br /><br />Otherwise, WOW, girl!!!<br /><br />Pattipattihttp://www.pattilacy.com/blognoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4984184121584258371.post-34322531186789035502010-08-03T20:06:55.585-07:002010-08-03T20:06:55.585-07:00Thanks for the comments everyone and I think I lik...Thanks for the comments everyone and I think I like draws better to, or maybe something like that. Thanks for the suggestions.Pattihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00685341739870191402noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4984184121584258371.post-43979703139058057952010-08-03T15:16:37.678-07:002010-08-03T15:16:37.678-07:00The whole idea of rescuing a dragon is fun!The whole idea of rescuing a dragon is fun!Southpawhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16539290964546504171noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4984184121584258371.post-59950088459449778142010-08-03T10:36:41.358-07:002010-08-03T10:36:41.358-07:00Dragons! Damsels! Love! Sounds like it has everyt...Dragons! Damsels! Love! Sounds like it has everything it needs to make it fantabulous! And you told the whole hook in a very brief space. Great job!! I'm still working on that, but you've got it down.<br /><br />And I like the word "draws." It paints a picture of random picking from a hat - the holding his breath, squeezing his eyes, reaching in and hoping he gets something easy and instead gets something he knows is beyond him... There's a whole scene in that word. <br /><br />Assigned sounds more like sitting in class and the teacher gives it out. It's more passive.<br /><br />But that's my own opinion... in any case... sounds awesome!Heidi Willishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18420802651029097379noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4984184121584258371.post-67008409963676541242010-08-03T10:34:34.983-07:002010-08-03T10:34:34.983-07:00The hardest part is doing it. You'll do great....The hardest part is doing it. You'll do great. Good luck!Candylandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08956196611348299424noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4984184121584258371.post-69099062285111906542010-08-03T06:16:34.777-07:002010-08-03T06:16:34.777-07:00Oh boy! I'd read this book :)
I hope he saves...Oh boy! I'd read this book :)<br /><br />I hope he saves the girl.Aubriehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10884036126491922530noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4984184121584258371.post-31750498507978283062010-08-03T06:10:18.166-07:002010-08-03T06:10:18.166-07:00Wow. I really like that. Sounds like a great boo...Wow. I really like that. Sounds like a great book! "Assigned" might be better but I like 'draws' too. It has more of your 'voice'.<br />And does she really have to die?Anne Gallagherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05816355522284492131noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4984184121584258371.post-37858647211493919132010-08-02T20:24:32.347-07:002010-08-02T20:24:32.347-07:00Karen: I think I'll change it to assigned, tha...Karen: I think I'll change it to assigned, thanks for the comment.<br /><br />Jessie: You were my inspiration.Pattihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00685341739870191402noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4984184121584258371.post-60478933398007184232010-08-02T19:44:45.181-07:002010-08-02T19:44:45.181-07:00It's hard to put your ideas out there, but you...It's hard to put your ideas out there, but you do not need to fear rejection. It's very good-succinct and intriguing. We can still be friends. Now for those contests...Jessie Oliveroshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06232456334069794107noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4984184121584258371.post-69486676090164801822010-08-02T19:42:42.172-07:002010-08-02T19:42:42.172-07:00Kudos to you for putting yourself out there! :)
I...Kudos to you for putting yourself out there! :)<br /><br />I'm a little confused about "draws dragon rescue." Like he draws it from a bunch of tasks as the one he must complete? <br /><br />Sorry if that's a stupid question. It's late and my brain is mush.kahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10789825860272178765noreply@blogger.com